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Criterion A

The student outlines the topic of their study at the beginning of the essay, making its aim clear to the reader

Comment

The student effectively outlines the topic of their study in the introduction of the EE by clearly stating the focus on caffeine and its effects on short-term memory in college students. The research question, "To what extent does acute consumption of caffeine enhance short-term memory of college students?" is explicitly presented, providing a clear direction for the investigation. Additionally, the student establishes the relevance of the topic by discussing the prevalence of caffeine consumption among students and its potential implications for academic performance.


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Criterion A

The student outlines the topic of their study at the beginning of the essay, making its aim clear to the reader

Comment

The student effectively outlines the topic of their study in the introduction of the EE by clearly stating the focus on caffeine and its effects on short-term memory in college students. The research question, "To what extent does acute consumption of caffeine enhance short-term memory of college students?" is explicitly presented, providing a clear direction for the investigation. Additionally, the student establishes the relevance of the topic by discussing the prevalence of caffeine consumption among students and its potential implications for academic performance.


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Criterion A

The reader is presented with the research question at the beginning of the essay

Comment

The student presents the research question, "To what extent does acute consumption of caffeine enhance short-term memory of college students?" on both the title page and at the beginning of the Introduction.


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Correct
Criterion A

The essay clearly establishes how the posed research question is connected to the student’s knowledge and understanding of the topic

Comment

The student has effectively established a clear connection between the research question and their understanding of the effects of caffeine on short-term memory. By discussing various studies, such as those by Ajjimaporn et al. (2022) and Tasya et al. (2023), the student demonstrates a solid grasp of the topic and presents a well-rounded view, considering both supporting and opposing evidence.


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Criterion A

It is evident that the topic was not based on student’s personal experiences or opinions as such approach would be considered inappropriate

Comment

The student has effectively focused on a research question that addresses the scientific investigation of caffeine's effects on short-term memory. The essay provides a thorough examination of various studies, presenting evidence from both supporting and opposing perspectives without infusing personal biases or experiences. The references to multiple scholarly sources throughout the EE demonstrate the student's commitment to an objective analysis of the topic rather than personal opinions.


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Incorrect
Criterion A

The student establishes a clear context of the study, i.e it describes the relevant background information, purpose, and focus of the essay

Comment

It is unclear how neurotransmission is relevant in this essay. The student would have been advised to remove this.


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Incorrect
Criterion A

The essay includes a clear description of the approach to the topic, including a discussion of relevant psychological theories and studies and how they will be incorporated into the work

Comment

It is unclear how neurotransmission is relevant in this essay. The student would have been advised to remove this.


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Incorrect
Criterion A

The essay’s focus is maintained throughout its whole length and there are no unnecessary discussions included

Comment

It is unclear how neurotransmission is relevant in this essay. The student would have been advised to remove this.


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Correct
Criterion A

The reader is presented with the research question at the beginning of the essay

Comment

The student presents the research question, "To what extent does acute consumption of caffeine enhance short-term memory of college students?" on both the title page and at the beginning of the Introduction.


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Correct
Criterion A

The student outlines the topic of their study at the beginning of the essay, making its aim clear to the reader

Comment

The student effectively outlines the topic of their study in the introduction of the EE by clearly stating the focus on caffeine and its effects on short-term memory in college students. The research question, "To what extent does acute consumption of caffeine enhance short-term memory of college students?" is explicitly presented, providing a clear direction for the investigation. Additionally, the student establishes the relevance of the topic by discussing the prevalence of caffeine consumption among students and its potential implications for academic performance.


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Correct
Criterion A

The student describes the academic context and justification behind the choice of their research question

Comment

The student has effectively articulated the academic context for their research question by discussing the widespread consumption of caffeine among college students and its potential impact on short-term memory. They justified the importance of this investigation by highlighting the inconclusive nature of existing research and the relevance of cognitive enhancement for academic performance. The exploration of neurotransmission and the distinction between short-term and working memory further demonstrate a comprehensive understanding of the topic.


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Criterion A

The essay clearly explains why the topic is worthy of investigation based on the presented academic context and what is the current scope of knowledge of the area

Comment

The student articulates the significance of investigating the effects of caffeine on short-term memory by highlighting its widespread consumption among college students and the implications for academic performance. The EE effectively contextualizes the research question within the current understanding of cognitive function, emphasizing the potential benefits and drawbacks of caffeine consumption. The discussion of both supporting and opposing evidence demonstrates the complexity of the topic and the necessity for further research to clarify the relationship between caffeine and memory enhancement.


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Correct
Criterion A

It is evident that the topic was not based on student’s personal experiences or opinions as such approach would be considered inappropriate

Comment

The student has effectively focused on a research question that addresses the scientific investigation of caffeine's effects on short-term memory. The essay provides a thorough examination of various studies, presenting evidence from both supporting and opposing perspectives without infusing personal biases or experiences. The references to multiple scholarly sources throughout the EE demonstrate the student's commitment to an objective analysis of the topic rather than personal opinions.


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Correct
Criterion A

The essay clearly establishes how the posed research question is connected to the student’s knowledge and understanding of the topic

Comment

The student has effectively established a clear connection between the research question and their understanding of the effects of caffeine on short-term memory. By discussing various studies, such as those by Ajjimaporn et al. (2022) and Tasya et al. (2023), the student demonstrates a solid grasp of the topic and presents a well-rounded view, considering both supporting and opposing evidence.


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Correct
Criterion A

It is evident that the topic was not based on student’s personal experiences or opinions as such approach would be considered inappropriate

Comment

The student has effectively focused on a research question that addresses the scientific investigation of caffeine's effects on short-term memory. The essay provides a thorough examination of various studies, presenting evidence from both supporting and opposing perspectives without infusing personal biases or experiences. The references to multiple scholarly sources throughout the EE demonstrate the student's commitment to an objective analysis of the topic rather than personal opinions.


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Incorrect
Criterion A

The essay includes a clear description of the approach to the topic, including a discussion of relevant psychological theories and studies and how they will be incorporated into the work

Comment

It is unclear how neurotransmission is relevant in this essay. The student would have been advised to remove this.


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Incorrect
Criterion A

The student establishes a clear context of the study, i.e it describes the relevant background information, purpose, and focus of the essay

Comment

It is unclear how neurotransmission is relevant in this essay. The student would have been advised to remove this.


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Incorrect
Criterion A

The essay’s focus is maintained throughout its whole length and there are no unnecessary discussions included

Comment

It is unclear how neurotransmission is relevant in this essay. The student would have been advised to remove this.


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Incorrect
Criterion A

The essay’s focus is maintained throughout its whole length and there are no unnecessary discussions included

Comment

It is unclear how neurotransmission is relevant in this essay. The student would have been advised to remove this.


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Incorrect
Criterion A

The student establishes a clear context of the study, i.e it describes the relevant background information, purpose, and focus of the essay

Comment

It is unclear how neurotransmission is relevant in this essay. The student would have been advised to remove this.


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Incorrect
Criterion A

The essay includes a clear description of the approach to the topic, including a discussion of relevant psychological theories and studies and how they will be incorporated into the work

Comment

It is unclear how neurotransmission is relevant in this essay. The student would have been advised to remove this.


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Correct
Criterion A

The resources used are predominantly from accredited psychological journals and books (and not from media or “pop-psychology” outlets as these do not offer an appropriate depth or academic standards to develop a balanced investigation)

Comment

The student effectively utilized predominantly accredited psychological journals, such as "Journal of Psychology," "Cureus," and "Neuroimage," which provide reliable and scientifically valid information. These sources contribute depth to the investigation of caffeine's effects on short-term memory, ensuring a balanced examination of the topic.


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Correct
Criterion A

The essay incorporates appropriate resources and includes direct references to the research question

Comment

The student effectively integrates relevant research to support their investigation into the effects of caffeine on short-term memory. The inclusion of studies such as Ajjimaporn et al. (2022) and Tasya et al. (2023) provides clear evidence that low doses of caffeine can enhance memory performance, directly linking findings to the research question. The student maintains a consistent focus on the research question throughout the essay, demonstrating a thorough understanding of the topic and its implications for college students.


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Correct
Criterion A

The essay is mainly based on secondary sources

Comment

The student utilizes a variety of secondary sources, including studies, articles, and literature reviews, to investigate the effects of caffeine on short-term memory. The essay references multiple studies, such as those by Ajjimaporn et al. (2022) and Tasya et al. (2023), to support claims about caffeine's cognitive effects. Furthermore, the inclusion of diverse sources enhances the reliability of the findings and provides a comprehensive overview of the topic under investigation.


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Correct
Criterion A

The essay incorporates appropriate resources and includes direct references to the research question

Comment

The student effectively integrates relevant research to support their investigation into the effects of caffeine on short-term memory. The inclusion of studies such as Ajjimaporn et al. (2022) and Tasya et al. (2023) provides clear evidence that low doses of caffeine can enhance memory performance, directly linking findings to the research question. The student maintains a consistent focus on the research question throughout the essay, demonstrating a thorough understanding of the topic and its implications for college students.


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Correct
Criterion A

The resources used are predominantly from accredited psychological journals and books (and not from media or “pop-psychology” outlets as these do not offer an appropriate depth or academic standards to develop a balanced investigation)

Comment

The student effectively utilized predominantly accredited psychological journals, such as "Journal of Psychology," "Cureus," and "Neuroimage," which provide reliable and scientifically valid information. These sources contribute depth to the investigation of caffeine's effects on short-term memory, ensuring a balanced examination of the topic.


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Correct
Criterion A

The essay is mainly based on secondary sources

Comment

The student utilizes a variety of secondary sources, including studies, articles, and literature reviews, to investigate the effects of caffeine on short-term memory. The essay references multiple studies, such as those by Ajjimaporn et al. (2022) and Tasya et al. (2023), to support claims about caffeine's cognitive effects. Furthermore, the inclusion of diverse sources enhances the reliability of the findings and provides a comprehensive overview of the topic under investigation.


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Incorrect
Criterion A

If the student discusses neuro-cognitive processing in regard to behavior, the essay’s focus is maintained on the behavior or individual experience and not on any biological processing descriptions

Comment

It is unclear how neurotransmission is relevant in this essay. The student would have been advised to remove this.


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Incorrect
Criterion A

The student establishes a clear context of the study, i.e it describes the relevant background information, purpose, and focus of the essay

Comment

It is unclear how neurotransmission is relevant in this essay. The student would have been advised to remove this.


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Incorrect
Criterion A

The essay includes a clear description of the approach to the topic, including a discussion of relevant psychological theories and studies and how they will be incorporated into the work

Comment

It is unclear how neurotransmission is relevant in this essay. The student would have been advised to remove this.


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Correct
Criterion A

The essay is mainly based on secondary sources

Comment

The student utilizes a variety of secondary sources, including studies, articles, and literature reviews, to investigate the effects of caffeine on short-term memory. The essay references multiple studies, such as those by Ajjimaporn et al. (2022) and Tasya et al. (2023), to support claims about caffeine's cognitive effects. Furthermore, the inclusion of diverse sources enhances the reliability of the findings and provides a comprehensive overview of the topic under investigation.


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Correct
Criterion A

The resources used are predominantly from accredited psychological journals and books (and not from media or “pop-psychology” outlets as these do not offer an appropriate depth or academic standards to develop a balanced investigation)

Comment

The student effectively utilized predominantly accredited psychological journals, such as "Journal of Psychology," "Cureus," and "Neuroimage," which provide reliable and scientifically valid information. These sources contribute depth to the investigation of caffeine's effects on short-term memory, ensuring a balanced examination of the topic.


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Correct
Criterion A

The essay incorporates appropriate resources and includes direct references to the research question

Comment

The student effectively integrates relevant research to support their investigation into the effects of caffeine on short-term memory. The inclusion of studies such as Ajjimaporn et al. (2022) and Tasya et al. (2023) provides clear evidence that low doses of caffeine can enhance memory performance, directly linking findings to the research question. The student maintains a consistent focus on the research question throughout the essay, demonstrating a thorough understanding of the topic and its implications for college students.


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Criterion A

If the student chose a topic that has been well-researched and documented, they ensure their research provides a novel insight into the subject area

Comment

The student's exploration of caffeine's effects on short-term memory is supported by a range of studies that provide an overview of the topic. For instance, Ajjimaporn et al. (2022) demonstrates a significant improvement in working memory performance after caffeine consumption. Additionally, including perspectives from Tasya et al. (2023) and Bain (2023) shows the complexity of the relationship between caffeine and memory, allowing for a nuanced discussion. The student's ability to synthesize findings from both supporting and opposing studies contributes to a deeper understanding of the subject matter.


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Criterion A

If the student chose a topic that has been well-researched and documented, they ensure their research provides a novel insight into the subject area

Comment

The student's exploration of caffeine's effects on short-term memory is supported by a range of studies that provide an overview of the topic. For instance, Ajjimaporn et al. (2022) demonstrates a significant improvement in working memory performance after caffeine consumption. Additionally, including perspectives from Tasya et al. (2023) and Bain (2023) shows the complexity of the relationship between caffeine and memory, allowing for a nuanced discussion. The student's ability to synthesize findings from both supporting and opposing studies contributes to a deeper understanding of the subject matter.


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Criterion A

If the student chose a topic that has been well-researched and documented, they ensure their research provides a novel insight into the subject area

Comment

The student's exploration of caffeine's effects on short-term memory is supported by a range of studies that provide an overview of the topic. For instance, Ajjimaporn et al. (2022) demonstrates a significant improvement in working memory performance after caffeine consumption. Additionally, including perspectives from Tasya et al. (2023) and Bain (2023) shows the complexity of the relationship between caffeine and memory, allowing for a nuanced discussion. The student's ability to synthesize findings from both supporting and opposing studies contributes to a deeper understanding of the subject matter.


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Criterion B

The student only incorporates source material in their essay that is relevant and appropriate to the posed research question

Comment

The student has incorporated relevant and appropriate source material that aligns closely with the research question regarding caffeine's effects on short-term memory in college students. For instance, studies from Ajjimaporn et al. (2022) and Tasya et al. (2023) provide supporting evidence for the thesis, highlighting the positive impact of low doses of caffeine on memory performance. Additionally, the inclusion of opposing studies such as Bain (2023) and Terry & Phifer (1986) enriches the discussion by presenting a balanced view of the topic.


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Criterion B

The student only incorporates source material in their essay that is relevant and appropriate to the posed research question

Comment

The student has incorporated relevant and appropriate source material that aligns closely with the research question regarding caffeine's effects on short-term memory in college students. For instance, studies from Ajjimaporn et al. (2022) and Tasya et al. (2023) provide supporting evidence for the thesis, highlighting the positive impact of low doses of caffeine on memory performance. Additionally, the inclusion of opposing studies such as Bain (2023) and Terry & Phifer (1986) enriches the discussion by presenting a balanced view of the topic.


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Criterion B

The student only incorporates source material in their essay that is relevant and appropriate to the posed research question

Comment

The student has incorporated relevant and appropriate source material that aligns closely with the research question regarding caffeine's effects on short-term memory in college students. For instance, studies from Ajjimaporn et al. (2022) and Tasya et al. (2023) provide supporting evidence for the thesis, highlighting the positive impact of low doses of caffeine on memory performance. Additionally, the inclusion of opposing studies such as Bain (2023) and Terry & Phifer (1986) enriches the discussion by presenting a balanced view of the topic.


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Criterion B

The student only incorporates source material in their essay that is relevant and appropriate to the posed research question

Comment

The student has incorporated relevant and appropriate source material that aligns closely with the research question regarding caffeine's effects on short-term memory in college students. For instance, studies from Ajjimaporn et al. (2022) and Tasya et al. (2023) provide supporting evidence for the thesis, highlighting the positive impact of low doses of caffeine on memory performance. Additionally, the inclusion of opposing studies such as Bain (2023) and Terry & Phifer (1986) enriches the discussion by presenting a balanced view of the topic.


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Criterion B

The student only incorporates source material in their essay that is relevant and appropriate to the posed research question

Comment

The student has incorporated relevant and appropriate source material that aligns closely with the research question regarding caffeine's effects on short-term memory in college students. For instance, studies from Ajjimaporn et al. (2022) and Tasya et al. (2023) provide supporting evidence for the thesis, highlighting the positive impact of low doses of caffeine on memory performance. Additionally, the inclusion of opposing studies such as Bain (2023) and Terry & Phifer (1986) enriches the discussion by presenting a balanced view of the topic.


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Criterion B

The student incorporates the source material effectively throughout the main body of the essay

Comment

The student would have been advised to focus more on presenting a more critical analysis of the studies rather than providing a complete description of the studies. The student can include only the most relevant information of the studies and then devote more words to the critical analysis to show evidence of critical thinking and therefore more effectively incorporate the materials into the essay.


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Criterion B

The student ensures the source material is mostly from accredited scientific sources

Comment

The student ensures the source material is mostly from accredited scientific sources. The essay references studies published in reputable journals, such as "Physiology & Behavior" and "Malaysian Journal of Medicine & Health Sciences." Additionally, the inclusion of peer-reviewed articles from "Journal of Clinical Psychology" and "Psychology of Sport and Exercise" supports the student's claims.


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Criterion B

The student ensures the source material is mostly from accredited scientific sources

Comment

The student ensures the source material is mostly from accredited scientific sources. The essay references studies published in reputable journals, such as "Physiology & Behavior" and "Malaysian Journal of Medicine & Health Sciences." Additionally, the inclusion of peer-reviewed articles from "Journal of Clinical Psychology" and "Psychology of Sport and Exercise" supports the student's claims.


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Criterion B

The student states any technical or subject-specific terms alongside a clear explanation, demonstrating their knowledge and understanding of the topic

Comment

The student has effectively defined and explained key subject-specific terms throughout the EE, such as "caffeine," "short-term memory," and "working memory." For example, the distinction between short-term and working memory is articulated, providing clarity on their usage in the context of the research question.


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Criterion B

The student states any technical or subject-specific terms alongside a clear explanation, demonstrating their knowledge and understanding of the topic

Comment

The student has effectively defined and explained key subject-specific terms throughout the EE, such as "caffeine," "short-term memory," and "working memory." For example, the distinction between short-term and working memory is articulated, providing clarity on their usage in the context of the research question.


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Criterion B

The essay includes a clear evaluation of the obtained evidence from empirical studies based on culture, ethics, gender, and employed methodology

Comment

The student evaluates the empirical studies referenced in the EE, discussing their methodologies, sample populations, and the implications of cultural and ethical considerations. They mention the different methodologies used across studies, such as the randomized crossover design in Ajjimaporn et al. (2022) and the independent measures design in Mohamed et al. (2021), which help in understanding caffeine's effects on short-term memory. The student also notes potential gender biases in sample selection, especially in studies focusing only on male participants, which may limit the applicability of the findings. Their discussion on ethical approval for all studies highlights the importance of ethical considerations in psychological research.


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Criterion C

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Criterion A

The resources used are predominantly from accredited psychological journals and books (and not from media or “pop-psychology” outlets as these do not offer an appropriate depth or academic standards to develop a balanced investigation)

Comment

The student effectively utilized predominantly accredited psychological journals, such as "Journal of Psychology," "Cureus," and "Neuroimage," which provide reliable and scientifically valid information. These sources contribute depth to the investigation of caffeine's effects on short-term memory, ensuring a balanced examination of the topic.


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Criterion A

The essay incorporates appropriate resources and includes direct references to the research question

Comment

The student effectively integrates relevant research to support their investigation into the effects of caffeine on short-term memory. The inclusion of studies such as Ajjimaporn et al. (2022) and Tasya et al. (2023) provides clear evidence that low doses of caffeine can enhance memory performance, directly linking findings to the research question. The student maintains a consistent focus on the research question throughout the essay, demonstrating a thorough understanding of the topic and its implications for college students.


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