SCP Foundation

thank you to yossi, tyumen, and snapdragon

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gotta hand it to you, that's pretty evil

very well written, doesn't overstay its welcome, and is an interesting concept with enough leeway for a wide range of interpretation

and made to serve as a conduit for all sin incurred by the Foundation and its personnel.

This is such a strong hook for the rest of the piece and pretty much grabbed me in to continue reading. I did find it dragging a bit towards the back half of the piece, but I feel that's more a matter of personal preference of writing rather than any sort of actionable feedback I could provide. All in all, though, this is a solid piece. +1

To create an anomalous entity that can absorb the sins of our Foundation for an indefinite period of time, ensuring that our Foundation will remain favored by divinity.

Very hard line, and the rest that follows is quite good.

I think this works in theory but is hindered by the fact that the proposals that are there to help Elliot are only put together after he is already effectively dead. Stopping the whole sin transfer thing would be the right thing to do, but it really doesn't matter at that point just as it doesn't really create more 'ethical cost' (a phrasing that I don't think makes much sense) at that point, especially compared to dropping sins on new people.

I think a better way to do this would be to have the requests come after the start of dementia, but before Elliot is effectively dead and probably never let it fully reach that point. Right now, it's a -1

I assume the point is that Elliot is full and cannot absorb any more sin, and therefore the Foundation is being evil again.

Really, really good work. Great idea. Deserving of an upvote, but I have none to provide.