TL;DR: Looking for feedback on a condensed version of a university admissions topic letter (required). I will explain my ideology on said topic with the required format and explain with as much detail without exceeding the max characters. I am looking to explain the errors in the westernized version of marriage with science and working on shifting our knowledge to our biological imperative (in the blog, as there is no maximum characters) Do I follow the guidelines of the topic question? Any grammatical errors? The last and most important question will be if the review board will see this too offensive, to the point that I don't get admitted? Basically I am looking for editors but I have only few people who can digest this information and I know this place and TRP may give me the answers I am searching for, not be confused with the fact that I am using you guys to piggyback my idea and rant/complain. I am in fact looking for a solution, although small I am starting a small business mentoring people with the ideology in my area. NOT PROMOTING MY BUSINESS but if you are interested send me a message. Topic E: Natural Laws Vs Societal Progression (focusing on the gender wars) Choose an issue of importance to you—the issue could be personal, school related, local, political, or international in scope—and write an essay in which you explain the significance of that issue to yourself, your family, your community, or your generation. The issue of the gender wars is as real as most people will not accept. For me, this “natural law” engrained in everybody’s DNA, but most certainly in the generations since the 1960’s has caused me to be in a state of self-reflection, but no matter what angle of attack or scenario I find myself in, the fact remains the same that society will shift away from our natural tendencies as male and female. Now, this many not make sense to most of you, but in fact you do know what this means, our advancements in social engineering is making alarming progress, but due to evolution taking long periods of time to adjust to geographical climates, terrain, and microorganisms, being a part of normal evolution not only in humans but all existing creatures on this planet. This is not an issue, but an alarm to what is coming to society. As of now we have had extremist such as third wave feminists and Islamic terrorist groups that are shifting our social dynamics. There are few ways to predict the future, but history does tend to repeat itself and the world is in a gradual revolution. Just as in history it comes in waves, phases of ideologies and structures that govern the societal path. The gender war is continuing to manipulate society in the “west” and also affecting areas such as Japan, such that marriage is becoming a forced structure for females to go against their biological instinct, but that is not the issue it is the propaganda that feminism, SJW, and other radical idealists have pushed a little too far, institutionalizing current generations that they can do anything, they can, but they did not mention the consequences. Let us start off for instance that this push on fighting biological imperatives is crucifying most women. The older I become the more single older women I see that are miserable, single, or divorced due to unhappiness, they have been lied to that they can have both successful careers and wholesome families. This is the problem with the sweeping generalization in society there is always a small percentage that do make it work, but those odds are small, gambling with a bet for both a successful career and family is difficult and here is the fact on why. Marriage is delusion itself, the façade that media, society, and cultural upbringing place on marriage is mostly for the sole purpose of social status and security for a woman in a heterosexual relationship for an exchange in a man’s emotional fulfillment at a marriage’s core, again this is in general census. There is a competition in society that everyone is starting to unravel, the fact that we in the west have commercialized everything for the sake of consumerism, marriage and in recent decades’, divorce being another path for consumerism flux. This country is ultimately one of the best countries in the world in many regards, but the shift of the U.S. is heading towards a decline, the statement written above contributes to the regression of societal stature. I am not one against the flow of economics to excrete throughout society, but by making people miserable, with the fabrications that westernized society has pedestalized, the “American Dream” in effort to win over the opposite gender, primarily female has caused this unforeseen path for most that triggers other imperatives. To elaborate more on “The American Dream”, the vision goes as suburban house, good job to retire from, a nice spouse who has a good job, with a couple of nice kids, and throw a dog in there with a picket fence, again this is meant to be generic to illustrate the basics of the idea. There is something strange going on, go ahead and take a walk around your neighborhood and see who has this rendition of this lifestyle, if you do let us know. I think this dream only happens to the top %1 that live in Belmont/Weston, MA and Malibu, CA. For average Americans this reality is almost the polar opposite, and here is why. The idea that Settling down with a somebody that has been around the block and gained experiences, but more times than not, they have been adversely negative, due to the biological evolution of our anatomy there is a decay and decline in the fulfillments of both party members in a heterosexual marriage (I will elaborate more on this in another post). A house, mortgage, cars, and kids you can't even begin to afford to include working 50-60 work weeks with little time for sleep, let alone connecting (this goes for both spouses) and leaving those standing perpetually tired. According to Zillow, your total monthly payment will be around $1,850 – 2,500 (NY, NJ) and $1,500 - $6,000 (CA) 1 , Include the average inflation rate every year for cost of living (COL) 2-3% is expected in 20172 depending on the area and assuming the citizens have a “good” credit score. average FICO score in America is 695 . In some cases either spouse, typically under so much financial and marital pressure that they become the ultimate groveling yes-man at the workplace, this, of course, causes problems for your colleagues. Atypical heart problems beginning for most spouses, but men are more prone.Men develop heart disease 10 years earlier, on average, than women do. They also have an early warning sign that few can miss: erectile dysfunction (ED). “It’s the canary in the coal mine,” says a Johns Hopkins expert. “Sexual problems often foretell heart problems.”3 Coming from psychologytoday.com, “based on a survey of over 2000 heterosexual couples, found that women initiated nearly 70% of all divorces.”4 Although the study does not go further after the divorce, the media displays this theory heavily that a woman’s biological imperative to seek a new secure partner, but based on government welfare, alimony, child services in the case children are involved. You see this currently with celebrities such as, Johnny Depp, Kobe Bryant, and Chris Rock. To be gender equal play devil’s advocate, I have yet to see a man initiate a divorce with a highly successful woman at a celebrity level to receive half of the female’s belongings, custody of their kids, and a forced paycheck to the now divorced father until the kid(s) are 18-year-old. As a famous comedian says in this video DISCLAIMER: MAY OBTAIN OFFENSIVE MATERIAL. 5 Most find themselves a former shell of the person they were, alone, in large debt, and in poor health. Years, or even decades, appear to have been flushed down the toilet. As sad as this is, there are no support groups for these men or helplines for this men the stats show this again, as I am a man of knowledge and look at societal shifts at a reality. Men die by suicide 3.5x more often than women. According to American Foundation for Suicide Prevention “On average, there are 117 suicides per day. White males accounted for 7 of 10 suicides in 2014. The rate of suicide is highest in middle age — white men in particular.” 6 I am not the person to throw stats left and right to prove that I am right about everything, again I do not have solution for everybody’s problems, nor will any human in this generation, but based on my experiences around the world, the people I have met, dated and just bumped elbows with. I do see a trend forming and this has been going on since before I was born. I now know we face an issue hidden at face value and I go through research of history to see what triggered these events and the answer will come soon with full detail and be sure to bookmark this blog in order to stay informed and as always Contact us for more information, questions, or even knowledge that you may think we find interesting. In general I believe there is one solution for the masses that will be proven to work as it has worked on not only me, but a small group of westerners in one way or another, our educational system shies away from the teachings of our biological imperatives, even throughout higher education, dependent on the professor and their experiences, but even still there are strict guidelines institutionalized for the general education does not discuss the core knowledge of what is programmed in our bodies. The indoctrination of education can be changed to better understand ourselves for prevention of the wars between genders amongst other additions. To be continued on another post. P.S. I realize the footnotes did not reformat to reddit. here are the links they will be displayed as such footnotes and you can CTRL+F the number to the associated footnote. I obviously will reformat the text for both admissions and the blog post, this specific topic is kind of what boosted my efforts in order to find a solution not just for men, but I think there is a way for women to get solve this, I know most of you will not agree, but please provide data that will deter me from trying to help this inevitable societal threat. 1 http://www.zillow.com/new-york-ny/rent-houses/ 1 http://www.zillow.com/homes/San-Francisco-CA_rb/ 2 FICO AVERAGE www.google.com/search 3 http://www.hopkinsmedicine.org/health/healthy_heart/know_your_risks/special-heart-risks-for-men 4 https://www.psychologytoday.com/blog/the-new-resilience/201508/women-initiate-divorce-much-more-men-heres-why 5 https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ldIwEG9xQ-M 6 https://afsp.org/about-suicide/suicide-statistics/